Five-Sentence Fiction ~ Distance

Lillie McFerrin

Dust to Dust

A Kiowa ledger drawing possibly depicting the ...

A Kiowa ledger drawing possibly depicting the Buffalo Wallow battle in 1874, a fight between Southern Plains Indians and the U.S. Army during the Red River War. (Photo credit: Wikipedia)

“How far you figure they’re away?…Do you think it’s them…the Comanches, I mean…is it true what they do to white women, Mr Hook?” Aliceanne Gibbs cried, tears running muddy streams from her blue eyes and down her dirty cheeks as she stared at the cloud of dust on the southern horizon.

“I’d say no more’n eight mile, maybe an hour to find us,” said the man called Eb Hook, who fancied himself a scout here on the high plains of Texas, though the true scouts like Billy Dixon knew him to be a boastful fool.

“I reckon if we hunker down under the brush in this buffalo wallow, they’ll ride around looking us, maybe follow our horses east,” Hook said, unsure if his ruse of running off their spent horses might work, but hopeful the colored boys from the Ninth Cavalry might scare the Comanche off before the the heathens found the girl and him.

But as the dust cloud to the south got closer, Hook remembered the last time he saw what pure butchering hell the Comanch’ did to men they captured, let alone the women, and decided he wouldn’t let them have their fun that June day in 1874.

When the squad of Ninth Cavalry troopers trailing a cloud of the Llano Estacado behind them rode in from the from the south, its leader, Sergeant Purvis Lee, looked at the scene in the wallow and said, “Why this fool Hook shoot the white lady and then hisself when no Comanch’ in hunnert mile o’ here?”

©Joseph Hesch 2012

This week’s little story is written in response to Lillie McFerrin’s Five-Sentence Fiction prompt “Distance.

6 thoughts on “Five-Sentence Fiction ~ Distance

    • Thanks, Doc! I’m enjoying the chance to play with flash and historical fiction, as I did in two previous 5SF responses. The genre is merely a frame upon which to spin conflict, stakes, character, and resolution. Glad you liked it!

  1. Wow, tragic end to that, and a really effective one too. You captured the style and the dialogue and the tone perfectly. It reminds me of those old captivity narratives – and now I want to know how Eb Hook and that woman ended up down in that Wallow in the first place!


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