Heartbeats ~ A Story

On the road - again, blurry eyed

(Photo credit: Konabish ~ Greg Bishop)

A 100-Word Drabble

It didn’t take but a couple of moments.

Heartbeats, really.

In the passenger seat Alison cussed me out for being such a Man and poured on the drama with the stabby exclamation point, “I wish I’d never met you and I wish you were dead.”

I reached to calm her, tell her I was sorry for being such a jerk, and took my eyes from the road for just a moment, the time it takes a sleepy trucker to drift his rig to our side of the road.

So that’s how we got here – a flash of light – two heartbeats.

Didn’t set out to write a drabble — a 100-word story — but son-of-a-gun if I didn’t end up with one. Not sure this is what Lillie McFerrin was expecting, either, when she asked for a five-sentence story based on the prompt MOMENTS.

Lillie McFerrin Writes

12 thoughts on “Heartbeats ~ A Story

  1. It’s definitely a strong piece — you’ve got quite a punch packed into 100 words.
    Stylistically, I’d like an exclamation point at the end of Allison’s statement — the preceding phrase seems to demand it.

  2. Well, wow! I bookmarked FSF earlier in 2013 and revisited the site tonight. Thought I’d wander to see what the prompt word generated from one in the community, that one randomly being you. A 100-word story in five sentences is impressive enough, but what you accomplished here is brilliant.

  3. Although a number of the stories for the FSF prompt this week involved death, this is a unique take on the subject. Nice job!

    P.S. I think I saw that truck as I was going down I-95 this morning…

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